🔒 Closed I suddenly wanted to write light novel pero inexperienced pa.

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A bullet fired from short distance
Shoooooshhh! The bullet pierce through the wind and hit my chest.


Bang!


The sound of fired gun comes from my back


As I took a glimpse backward to see who fired the gun


And I failed to recognise the person
Maybe because of the blurry vision as I lost my consciousness


Or Maybe I force my mind to not recognise the person was


My body slowly falling


S h e possibly can't ...


I Slowly smiled and said £#@£&_#%


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A man holding a book and drawing a circle using his other hand


Now now listen up young Lords.

24 good looking people
Well suited.
Probably from rich families


This magic circle is called


Lightning circle

Ito po yung chapter 1 any comment po sana

 

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I haven't written an actual light novel since the first time I tried writing was difficult as hell.
Well, I can at least suggest some things?

• Chapter 1 is somewhat too sudden?
• When an another word is connected to a sentence, don't try to split them. Unless it's intense.
• Chapter 1 ain't really gonna give us anything, so I'll expect that chapter 2 will have details about "your character"
• When giving details... hmm.. don't make it too direct? Just introduce those details with a flow.

This are the only things that i could possibly think of as of now since i'm currently brainded. heh.

oh yeah, don't forget that u need to setup a backbone for ur story and an ending. unless u don't want to know where you'll end up with

 

[xposedlars]

tnx