🔒 Closed Need your opinions on my poetry

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Lilangloc

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Hey I'm laclac inspiring to tell my story through music and poetry so tell me what ya think about this ballad poem excuse the language its the way I think and product of my environment well here goes.......

Its called "How Could You Forget"

Bypassing my focal skills
F***ing with each other like a local deal
Crying my sympathy toward you
Trying to please you so we can have a better view

Vivid recalls of how we invented s*x
Gloomy livid passion and hatred specs noted
Devoted, Bloated feeling loaded on this drank
Igniting dank, elevating till I'm unconscious also blank

This love affair chalked up as a lost
Can't accept this balk at all cost
Savoring this well know muddy water
It's my lifesaver from time to time, manslaughter



Yours truly,
LacLacangloc
 
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